User:Kameron.tomlin1/Valley of Childish Things/Knechthouse Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kameron.tomlin1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Valley of Childish Things - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Valley of Childish Things - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: I think the lead has a lot of useful information included in it. I just think that maybe the wording on the last phrase of the sentence could be improved slightly. Maybe remove "when to decide".

Summary:

You did a great job of explaining this short story which I found to be very confusing when I first reading it. Summary was easy to follow and provide a good amount of detail.

Biography:

I think this was a nice touch because I'm assuming you couldn't find any critical analysis of this really short story. I really enjoy you inclusion of her purpose for writing.