User:Kari dooran/The New World of English Words/EmilyMacHenry Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

kari.doran


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kari%20dooran/The_New_World_of_English_Words?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * The New World of English Words

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello, Kari.Doran, I appreciated reading about the English World of New Words and overall, you did a great job making the Article a better read. I like the very first sentence added into the lead section, although, it seems written more for an educational essay rather than a Wikipedia article. Try adding a fact rather than a sentence to make the article start up more helpful rather than asking a question. Also, possibly try adding a little more in the lead so the reader can get a better small summary of what they will be reading. The article body also starts out with a question, readers on Wikipedia look right for the factual part of the article, so try going right into the educational part of the article body. Another suggestion that I may give to you is linking other Wikipedia articles to some words that not everyone may know in the article body. For example, Etymology. Lastly, your second source says unavailable when clicked on. Other than that, you did a splendid job working on this article!