User:Karleeseek/Queer studies/MNC-2016 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kailynhill721, Karleeseek


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * No draft available
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Queer studies

Evaluate the drafted changes
Queer Studies

Lead Section


 * No need for quote from Marianne LaFrance
 * Not much need for improvement
 * Mention of Eve Kosofsky Sedgwick in photo but not mentioned in lead section (introduce as founding scholar in section

Background


 * Give examples of other countries outside US that have similar courses offered
 * Not much need for improvement

History


 * Anything earlier??
 * Naming of the first taught courses- these have historical impact, it’s important to know what these courses were
 * Impact these strides had for the community (whether good or bad)

Queer Studies at non US Universities


 * “Diverso UFMG organizes since 2016..” correction to “Diverso UMFG has organized since 2016..”
 * Last sentence in first paragraph about Brazil needs major grammatical correction
 * Clarification needed in second paragraph about Brazil
 * Year needed in last paragraph about Brazil
 * Much of first paragraph about China is irrelevant to the section (seems more like an abstract to a study)
 * Analysis of article?? This is not needed in section (second paragraph about China)
 * Major improvements to section about China needed, reads as an analysis of a research article
 * No recommendations for South Africa section
 * Other countries outside Western culture needed if possible