User:Karsenpierce/Bombay plague epidemic/Mwb8265 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Karsenpierce


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Karsenpierce/Bombay_plague_epidemic?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bombay plague epidemic

Lead
The current article lead was lacks some information, however the updates that are in the user's sandbox fulfill the needs in the lead and provide more context about the topic. In the intro, the final sentence to be added about the population fleeing to the country side seems unnecessary, and may be more effective later on in the article. The added information about the workers in cotton mills and other tradespeople help to explain those who were affected directly by the outbreak.

Content
The overall content of the article is excellent, unbiased and its clear the the authors are knowledgeable about the topic. The emphasis that is put on the detection period of the epidemic helps the reader understand how the lack of proper detection and response to that detection led to the overall worsening of the epidemic.

More information could be added on the causes of the epidemic and possibly on the overarching consequences resulting from it.

Overall the authors do a fantastic job of expanding on present information and also adding new information that was not previously added to the article

A lack of working links in the sources is the only notable critique, and also some of them seem to be lacking some information.