User:Kasmy/Thomas Bradwardine/K8shep Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kasmy, Thomas Bradwardine


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 * User:Kasmy/Thomas Bradwardine


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 * Thomas Bradwardine

Evaluate the drafted changes
Good work so far! I like what you've done in the first bolded paragraph, where you talk about how Al-kindi might have had an influence. I would love to see one example of that there. Make sure, in that paragraph especially, that you are citing after every sentence.

For the second paragraph in bold, you have a lot of detail. Good job here. You might want to add a sentence or two about why these ideas are notable. Not to make an argument, but maybe explaining what the purpose for that particular discussion is in the first place.

The only other thing I'd suggest is looking for more than these sources. Good job all around.

Response
Thank you! do plan to include what specific idea McVaugh and Clagett believe Bradwardine built his medical theory on, but I'm struggling to simplify it. I may use quotes instead. Speaking of citing, I've included a citation after the sentences you've recommended.

Thank you again! I'll try to see if I can tie in how this affected modern views.

I do have a few in mind, but I haven't figured out where to use them quite yet since the sources I have contain most of the information I've needed.