User:Katbel1/Half Angel/Alex E Mitchell Peer Review

When you read the plot description, can you follow the story of the movie? Note any parts that were confusing to you.

 * - Yeah I thought that the plot summary was concise and easy to follow, I'm not sure if there is more that happens in the ending of the movie that could be expanded upon because in this summary it doesn't really feel like there's much closure at the end of the story detailed here which might be nice to have. However, maybe the movie just isn't that great and the ending really doesn't expand much past that.

Are there internal wiki links to all relevant actors, production personnel, historical entities or events?

 * - As of now the only internal wiki links that I see are in the cast section, which is probably most important, but I think you could add more within the reception section. For example, there could be internal links to "Variety" and "Picturegoer".

Are there citations for any facts that do NOT come from watching the movie itself?

 * - Currently, there are no in text citations. I don't think any are needed in the plot section at its current state but I think there definitely needs to be some in the reception section for the specific articles/reviews being quoted.

Do you see any grammatical issues that the writer should correct?

 * - I think there might need to be a comma in between "Her old love affair" and "John Raymond" ("Her old love affair, John Raymond), but I'm not too sure.

Any other comments on the entry?

 * - This is a really good summary of a movie that probably most never heard of, I like how the reception and plot sections are both handled, but it might be nice to have some longer quotes in reception, at least for the second review rather than just saying that it restated the same thing as your first review.

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