User:Kate H. Vo/Susan Oki Mollway/Literally Legally Blonde Peer Review

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(provide username)Kate H. Vo
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Kate H. Vo/Susan Oki Mollway
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Susan Oki Mollway

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Lead is concise and written well explaining exactly what the article subject is about. The content in early life and education is thorough. The dates should probably be written like "1973 until 1976" or "1973 to 1976" not with a - dash in between. Need more content for her personal life, but good start. Professional career is very well written. Make sure to either italicize or put in quotations the works that she has authored depending on what they are. I would recommend making a separate section for her awards and associations.

Federal and Judicial Service is well written. Maybe add sub-headings to divide up the work she has done in her judicial career. Good job on the Notable Cases!

References I see the references are still a work in progress.

Overall impression: I think this is a really great start to your article! I like the idea of adding litigation and advocacy, judicial decision, and the sub-headings under judicial service etc. The article reads very well and has mostly good grammar. This sentence has some comma splices: "After her nomination lapsed without action by the United States Senate, she was renominated on January 7, 1997, to the same seat." delete the comma after 1997.