User:Katearb0n/Wet nurse/Wcubias Peer Review

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Katearb0n
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Wiki Fixes

- I'm not sure Wikipedia encourages you to write in bold font; given this, I would start by making the quick fix of turning your bold font text to normal.

- No need to reference the historian, I would advise rephrasing, here's my example: Historian Sally McMillen estimates in 1850 there were around 70,000 enslaved wet nurses in the South., "There were an estimated 70,000 enslaved wet nurses in the South in 1850."

Unattributed claims

"A wet nurse can help when a mother is unable or unwilling to breastfeed her baby. Before the development of infant formula in the 20th century, wet-nursing could save a baby's life."

Structure

This paragraph is strong, but needs a home. I'd advise against putting it in your lead-- don't be afraid to add a subsection if you can't find a place for it in an existing subsection: "Opposed to wet-nursing, dry-nursing is the practice of feeding a child artificially a starch, such as flour, mixed with liquid in a bottle. Dry-nursing posed certain health risks that could be detrimental to an infant's health, and was only used by lower class families who could not employ a wet nurse.It was used as a last resort for lower class families because dry-nursing did not encourage proper neonatal sucking and swallowing practices. Dry-nursing formulas could also potentially be contaminated with bacteria and pose serious health risks."

Lead

The original lead is very strong and your changes don't try to undermine that, so I applaud you for that. They provide good context and follow the tone of the previous Wikipedian, which is very difficult to do.

Content

The content you add is a great supplement to the existing content on the Wikipedia page. The groundwork for your topic was already laid by a previous Wikipedian, and you contributions serve to evolve on that concept by providing valuable accounts, i.e. slavery and child-minding. I do believe it would be helpful to add a subsection on "21st century influence," or "cultural influence." In this subsection you could highlight the connection to surrogacy.

Tone

Your tone is strong and falls in line with the Wikipedia style of writing.

Sources and References

Your sources are strong, and range in ther publication date, which is helpful to creating a balance in your evidence. It could be helpful to find a few more recent secondary sources which really go to bat for the influence of the Wet nurse.

Overall impression

The changes you make are supplementary to the article, and ther eis nothing wrong with that. It blends in very well with the existing content. I assume you are planning on adding more content, and I'm confident in your ability to do so, although I assume it will require digging for new sources. All in all, you fit the Wikipedia writing style really well and are making valuable additions to the wet nurse page.