User:Katefogarty7/Federico Cesi/MatthewStika Peer Review

General info
Katefogarty7
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Katefogarty7/Federico Cesi - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Federico Cesi - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Lead to your draft looks good, it has a concise opening statement that gives the reader an overview of what you're going to be discussing, that being Cesi and his research in astronomy.

The first thing I noticed when reading the original article was that is only covered a small portion of his background and the creation of the "Academy of the Lynxes." The article really doesn't dive into any of his research or contributions to the field of astronomy, but the addition in your sandbox is a good start on covering that. I think in addition to his contributions and research on the telescope, you could add some similar information about other studies he was involved in. I would also provide links to the wiki page on the two other astronomers that Cesi had become familiar with, both Tycho Brahe and Kepler have wiki articles you could site that could benefit the reader and give them more information on what type of studies they were involved in. I also believe that the addition of pictures, maybe one of the telescopes during his time, would give the reader a better understanding of what equipment he was dealing with.

All the citations that are provided in the sandbox draft are working correctly, and the sources both seem to be good quality. I think the addition of more sources like the ones you've provided would be beneficial to the article and would help provide more information on his contributions to astronomy.