User:Katie.scht/Media studies/Hannah.Morey Peer Review

General info
Katie.scht
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Katie.scht/Media studies
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Media studies

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
lt seems that the lead is succinct enough to not need a lot of editing. Maybe mention something about the creation of the television and the impact that had on media studies. I am shocked that the article has a lot less to do with the history of media studies and instead focuses on the countries that study them.

--on...? -Borton.-

Origin
I am not a fan of the origin section of the original article because there is no mention of why media studies needed to be a field of study. I think this is where it would be important to discuss how television affected media studies. Why was it made in the first place? There is another Wikipedia page called the History of Media Studies that is not thorough at all. Maybe use that as an opportunity to write something more in-depth about the creation of media as a study.

--Notes and citations on the first big media studies would be a valuable addition here, too. You'd just need to know what those studies were and how the shaped media studies history. It'd be a novel route to go down, and not something that I would have expected, but it might be fun to compose that kind of a section. -Borton

Content
The content is meaningful within your article, as it uses actual theories to explain the media studies article. Try to look for more recent information (I struggle with that, too, so don't worry.) Also, try to add some citations within the smaller country entries because there seem to be none in those small sections.

Tone
Your tone remains neutral throughout the course of the article which is nice. Keep sticking to the facts and remember to cite every statement you make.

Organization
Really good job following the flow of the orginal article, as keeping everything in alphabetical order makes life a lot easier. I also like how you followed your own flow, as you bring up older data first and then bring up the newer data.

Overall
If I would add anything else overall, I would look to see if you could make a section describing the different cultures surrounding media studies. Do the studies differ depending on Eastern or Western cultures? Are some things left out in studies that you found may be due to cultural differences?

Response to Peer Review
As I am getting ready to make my second batch of edits to the media studies page, I am very grateful that I had Hannah look at my article and let me know some areas that I may not have considered originally. With that in mind, here is what I took away from Hannah's peer review.

Because media studies is widely studied subject that serves as a catchall for many students, it wasn't overly shocking to me that there was a lot of academia discussion in the article. That doesn't mean that it should be lacking the history however. I knew before I received Hannah's feedback that I wanted to change the organization. This is the biggest task to fix and has really pushed me to think outside the box. In the final structure of the article, I hope to include more about the history that Hannah referred to so that the American definition of media studies can also be represented in the article.

As I am wrapping up the initial draft of my changes, I have run into the problem of sources. Because the term media studies has a different meaning to almost every continent, it hasn't been simple to find sources. While the article certainly could use some more sources, the overall weak structure of my article is more of concern to me at this point and will be addressed first. As the semester comes to a close and I have more time, I will attempt to find more articles that can further support claims written by other students. However, the unclear organization of the article has me and others in our class worried about the article's current state.

Hannah's feedback helped me add to the list of new edits that can be made during my second round of edits this semester. While there isn't enough time to fix everything that is concerning in the article, Hannah's perspective helped me narrow my vision on what needs work and what can wait until later on.