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Revisions for Mothers of the Movement
Mothers of the Movement is a group of women whose African American children have been killed by the police or by gun violence. Members of the group have appeared on various television shows, at award ceremonies, and political events to share their experiences losing a son or daughter to police violence and advocate for political change.

Participation in the 2016 Democratic National Convention
Seven women from the group—Gwen Carr, mother of Eric Garner; Sybrina Fulton, mother of Trayvon Martin; Maria Hamilton, mother of Dontre Hamilton; Lucy McBath, mother of Jordan Davis; Lezley McSpadden, mother of Michael Brown, Cleopatra Pendleton-Cowley, mother of Hadiya Pendleton; and Geneva Reed-Veal, mother of Sandra Bland—spoke in support of Clinton's candidacy for President during the July 2016 Democratic National Convention in Philadelphia. Clinton had reached out privately the previous November to meet with the women. The Mothers of the Movement subsequently joined Clinton on the campaign trail to support her candidacy and advocate for an end to these killings.

Samaria Rice, the mother of Tamir Rice, did not join the other mothers in their endorsement of Hillary Clinton. She did not see an acceptable level of commitment against police brutality from any of the candidates and therefore withheld her endorsement. She did support the other mothers, saying in an interview with Fusion, "I hope they going to hold her accountable for whatever discussions they had behind closed doors."

The Mothers of the Movement have been criticized for being used by the Clinton campaign, but members deny this claim.

Women's March 2017
Mothers of the Movement accompanied singer and actress Janelle Monae appearing at the Women's March on Washington on January 21, 2017 after the inauguration of President Donald Trump.

In the Media
Women from the Mothers of the Movement group appeared onThe Dr. Oz Show special episode entitled, "Healing America’s Grief: Mothers of The Movement And Mothers of Slain Officers Together For The First Time," which appeared on air September 12, 2016. The show featured the mothers of victims of police violence as well as mothers of police officers killed by civilians. Guests of the show included Sybrina Fulton, Lucy McBath, Geneva Reed-Veal, Cleopatra Cowley, Maria Hamilton, Samara Rice, Lesley McSpadden, Wanda Johnson, Gwen Carr, Valerie Zamarripa, Paulette Thompson, and Nancy Renninger. Both groups spoke about losing a son or daughter to violence and as well as the difficulties of grieving in public. Additionally, Reed-Veal explained the need for more global conversations about racism and violence.

Gwen Carr, Sybrina Fulton, and Lezley McSpadden spoke at the 2016 Triumph Awards, a joint venture by National Action Network and TV One to recognize distinguished individuals and corporations in civil rights, the arts, entertainment, education, business and sports who have made a positive impact on society by utilizing their talents and resources to help under-resourced communities. The ceremony was hosted at the Tabernacle Theater in Atlanta and aired on Sunday, Oct. 2, 2016, at 7 p.m. EDT.

In August 2016, several members appeared with Beyoncé at the Video Music Awards. Gwen Carr, Lezley McSpadden, and Sybrina Fulton had also appeared in the singer's short film "LEMONADE," accompanying her 2016 album of the same name, holding photos of their slain sons.

Mothers of the Movement Revision Plan

 * Separate current article into intro paragraph, Involvement at 2016 DNC, and Beyonce Music Video
 * Write more background information for the intro paragraph, pulling from suggested articles in the talk section
 * Possibly write more on each member of the group if there's enough citable information on each instead of just listing them
 * Add more description of where the women were in the Beyonce music video and what they were doing
 * Research and add more about the Mothers of the Movement activism outside of the DNC event

Article evaluation: 2018 Women's March

 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * There was a section that talks about the Impeachment Marches in response to Trump's position on immigration. This seems somewhat related, but since there's not much in that section that talks about the direct connection, it seemed a little irrelevant.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * This article does a relatively good job of remaining neutral, even though the topic is often politically charged. In the section about "Power to the Polls," it says, "Since Trump's election, with many of the policies perceived as harmful to women..." The author remained neutral by using the word "perceived" instead of saying that the policies were harmful to women. Language like this is used mostly throughout.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * The article consistently uses the word "marchers" to describe the people who participated in the march. I like that this is a gender-neutral term, but I would have liked better if there was a paragraph about the inclusion of men in the march, as well as members of the LGBTQ+ community.
 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * The sources I checked are linked correctly and support the claims of the article.
 * Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * Many facts were backed up by articles from local news stations, PBS News Hour, BBC News, etc. For the most part these sources are reliable and generally neutral. There were a few sources such as The New York Times that have been known to lean a little left, but there were no blatently inappropriate or unreliable sources.
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
 * Everything is up to date since the march happened a this year. There could be more information about several cities that participated. For example, in the body of the text, it mentions that Dallas held one of the largest marches, yet it didn't get it's own section like some other cities did. I would have also liked to see more information about the DACA conversation that was happening at this time. There were also some great speeches (Halsey's comes to mind) that were given across the country that gained traction on social media.
 * Check out the Talk page of the article. What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
 * The talk page mostly documents changes made regarding participating cities and making sure attendee numbers were accurate.
 * How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?
 * I'm not sure where to find the rating, but it is a part of the WikiProject called The 50,000 Challenge. This project aims to make 50,000 article improvements -- 1,000 for each state -- which will improve the quality of existing articles and generate more information.
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?
 * In class, we talked about our personal experiences at the march whereas the Wikipedia article does not include personal anecdotes, only information from properly cited sources. Because we can talk about our own experiences in class, our own biases and feelings are naturally intertwined in the way we talk about the event.