User:Katrinabauman20/Ark of Bukhara/Ckoerper Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Katrinabauman20


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Ark of Bukhara


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ark of Bukhara

Evaluate the drafted changes
'''I believe you have great sources for your construction paragraph. The addition uses neutral tone and nothing is biased. Construction is of great relevance to the article and adds some much needed information about how the structure was built. I thought the content was organized well based off of time. Overall I think you found some interesting facts that make a difference to the article with adding your section.'''

'''I had just found a couple grammar mistakes within your section of the article. "After his death, the great citadel was put out of commission to mourn the prince." "3000(3000 needs to be spelled out or sentence rearranged) years later, Budun Bukhar Khudah restored the citadel." My only other critique is that you have a lot of short sentences and it is always good to mix compound and short sentences for variety writing.'''

Most of the critique form does not apply due to only addition of the construction information.

Great Work!