User:Katrinabauman20/Ark of Bukhara/Lkirkley Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Katrinabauman20


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Katrinabauman20/Ark of Bukhara


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ark of Bukhara

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Overall, I really liked the changes that you've added. I do worry that there is some slight flowery language that might not be needed within the first section. However, I do think that you really provide a lot of useful input into the article, and the amount of sources you have really allow the reader to expand upon their knowledge really well.