User:Katrinabauman20/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Eendracht (1615)

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
The date is in the name of this article led me to believe it was some historical significance which was intriguing. Since I did not recognize the name before the date in the article title I was very interested in learning more.

Evaluate the article
Lead Section

I thought the lead section had some very well written parts but did need some improvements.


 * The start of the paragraph is well written and gives a broad description of the subject of the article.
 * There is some unsupported information given in the middle of the lead section though. Although the sentences explaining the heritage of the name of the boat are useful and interesting information, I do not think this belongs in the lead section. If the information was furthered explained at another point in the article I think it could have been fine, but since it is not I think the information would be better suited when discussing the commissioning of the ship.
 * I think there should also be additional sentences added to give more details of what is focused on in this article.

Content

Overall I think the content of this article is very well done.


 * One critique would be that the the section pertaining to charting Australia is incredibly difficult to follow. The quote used in the section seems very unnecessary as well, although there are some    important detail in the quote I think it could have been just as well said if it was paraphrased. There is also a lot of information in this section that does not pertain to the Eendracht.

Tone and Balance

I think the tone and balance of this article is very well done. There is no clear bias and the information is presented from a neutral point.

Sources and References

The sources were picked very well, they seem to come from a variety of reliable sources that would lead to a credible article.


 * The comment I have on sources is that the link in reference 1 does not work.

Organization and Writing Quality

These aspects of the article are in need of some assistance.


 * As stated above, the section on charting Australia is not well organized making it difficult to follow the article.
 * There are also some sentences that are awkwardly written. Specifically, the sentence discussing how the dish left by Hartog was rediscovered is oddly written.
 * Throughout the article there are some grammatical errors. An example is in the last sentence on the Departure from Holland section, where "employ" was used instead of "employment."

Images and Media

The images in the article seem a bit redundant, every image is pertaining to the Caert van't Landt van d'Eendracht.


 * I think the first image is a good addition to the article but the next two which are just close ups of the first photo seem unwarranted.
 * The caption of the first image is very good and for what the pictures are the other captions are good as well just unnecessary.

Talk Page Discussion

Any discussions on the Talk Page are about correcting information in the article to be correct. There are not a lot of corrections discussed but since there are some I think that shows an interest in the topic, making it a useful article.

Overall Impressions

The information in the article is really interesting and appears to be well researched. The timeline of Eendracht is difficult to follow but I think all of the important information is there. There could be a lot of improvement in the layout of each section and grammar in the article. Overall, I think this is a good article though.