User:KautharIbrahim/Community service/Cameronkalantar Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(KautharIbrahim)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:KautharIbrahim/Community_service?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

'''I found that this writing on Critical Service learning was super effective within this article. By including more information on what is occurring on a societal level and how this topic serves as a solution, I felt I was able to get a full understanding of it given how you presented the information. With that said, I found some aspects can still be improved to increase clarity. In regards to the "how we respond to issues" I find it would make it more clear if you were to break down exact examples of programs or actions that demonstrate these negative effects. This way I have a better understanding of what you are suggesting we move away from.'''

'''Within the information, you included I found it very helpful the way you introduced a problem on a large scale, broke it down into details and specific systemic issues, and then provided the solution. With this structure, I found the information was a lot easier to consume and understand as a whole. Overall, by including more specific examples throughout the explanation I find that it would be much more effective in communicating the point across.'''