User:KautharIbrahim/Community service/Yasminemahm. Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

KautharIbrahim


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:KautharIbrahim/Community_service?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Community service

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead has not been edited.

Content

I think it was a good decision to add a section to your article because the article is relatively short. I also think it would be a good idea to add an introduction sentence explaining more about what critical service learning is because I was a little confused about the transition from the article into this section. It is key that you include the sentence on the background of the historical ideologies of community service learning. The content is definitely relevant to the rest of the article. I still am confused about the historical background of the ideologies and when it became incorporated into the education sector, so a few more sentences about that could be helpful. Are there any specific practical examples in your articles on critical service learning programs in colleges in your articles?

Tone and Balance

I think it would be a good decision to switch from first person point of view to third person point of view, similar to the rest of the Wikipedia article. I think you were able to maintain neutrality well throughout your section in regards to tone. Are there current debates about the negatives of critical service learning programs being included in colleges?

Organization

I think you included the section in a good area because it is relevant to the colleges section it is under. The content is well written, easy to read, and I did not notice any obvious grammatical issues. It was also a good decision to break it down into three paragraphs as your section is very information dense.

Sources and References

Two out of three of the sources are from the 1990s which might be a little old, but I am not sure. There seems to be an issue with the format of how the dates are entered. I am not sure if there is supposed to be a link on the sandbox, but I was not able to open the links directly. The final point you made about critical service learning programs in college is not supported by a source, and I think it would be necessary.

Images and Media

There are no images included, but I think that was a good decision. I do not think images would add anything necessary to your section.