User:KautharIbrahim/Service-learning/Yasminemahm. Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

KautharIbrahim


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:KautharIbrahim/Service-learning?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Service-learning

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead section of the article has not been edited.

Content

The content in this section is very relevant and key as it highlights the current debates on service learning. Because of this, I think it should be linked into your other Wikipedia article as well because It is useful. You mentioned the authors Eby and Mitchell, but I think it would be helpful to add to add the study and/or paper that they make the claims in. I also think more practical examples that back up the critiques you mention would be helpful.

Tone and Balance

The second section has certain instances of first person that should be switched to third person. I also think the tone of the sections you added need to be adjusted a little bit. The tone is more argumentative and essay toned than the rest of the article. I think neutrality is mostly maintained because the claims are well supported. Additionally, both traditional service learning and critical service learning are well explained. The section you added on critical service learning seems to be trying to persuade towards it, though.

Organization

I think you could do another check for grammatical mistakes, as I noticed a few while reading through. The content is well written and easy to understand. It is also well organized, and I think the areas you added to are relevant.

Sources and References

The last few sentences are not cited in the first and second section you added. The sources you chose seem to be good sources. Including another more recent source would be helpful for more time relevant examples.

Images and Media

I do not think images or media would add anything necessary to your section, so I think it is a good idea to not include any