User:Kawther.H/Hydropower/StolteKate Peer Review

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Kawther.H


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 * Hydropower

Hydropower Peer Review:
Clarity:

In your Introduction you mention “ancient times” in your second paragraph, but I found this a bit vague. I would suggest being more specific of years/time range of when hydropower was first used/invented. This specificity could be used throughout your article such as your second paragraph of Hydroelectricity you mention “…that collects a certain amount of water” which could present the average amount of water a hydroelectric power plant can collect.

Structure:

In your second paragraph of Hydroelectricity “One of these types is one involving building a dam and a reservoir that collects a certain amount of water.” I recommend rewording this sentence or removing the word “one” and replacing it with “a process which involves…” or “Power plants involve…”. Starting sentences with the topic and finish with the stressing terms or important information will help the reader understand and interpretation.

Grammar and Spelling:

I noticed you capitalized the word “historical” in your third paragraph which I believe should not be capitalized. Also, I recommend removing some filler words such as “even some” in your fourth paragraph of your introduction.

Coverage:

You created a good coverage balance with your Hydroelectricity section, but there could be improvement with your Disadvantages and Limitation of Hydropower section. You mentioned in your Introduction “…by extension hydropower has other environmental benefits such as the reduction of fossil fuels, and improve climate conditions. On the other hand, there are multiple economic, sociological, and even some environmental downside…” but the benefits were not discussed in the body of your article.

Neutrality:

I noticed you mentioned “the people” in your article a couple of time (third paragraph of Hydroelectricity and first paragraph of Disadvantages and Limitation of Hydropower) which doesn’t follow neutrality. This could be fixed by specifying “homeowners” or finding and article that mentions a town/area that mentions this issue with hydropower noise/hazards.

Talk Page:

It is already mentioned in this articles Talk Page that statistics are needed. The citation I provided for you may help. I encourage speaking with the other writers on Wikipedia regarding these statistics to help you in providing statistics that are relevant to the article.

Citations:

In your third paragraph of Hydroelectricity there may be an opportunity to add more references as you only cited one for the paragraph. You references seem reliable and are up to date, but it would be beneficial to add more journal articles to balance out the websites you used. I found a citation that may be beneficial to you for statistics of how hydropower has helped decline the use of fossil fuels. Section 4.2: Reduction in CO2 Emissions Using Hydropower Instead of Fossil Fuels provided some amazing information you could use!

Citation: Meng, Ying et al. "Hydropower Production Benefits More From 1.5 °C Than 2 °C Climate Scenario". (2020) Water Resources Research, 56 (5), American Geophysical Union (AGU), doi:10.1029/2019wr025519. (https://agupubs.onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/epdf/10.1029/2019WR025519)

Strengths and Weaknesses:

The strengths in your article are that is easy to understand and you broke down major points of the topic into sections. I really liked your addition of Disadvantages and Limitation of Hydropower as the original article didn’t cover this.

Some weaknesses I noticed in your paper was you used a lot of transitioning words. Words like “furthermore” and “in this case” which could be taken out and replaced with the topic word mentioned in the previous sentence to help with the flow of the article.

Overall, I enjoyed reading your article! ~ StolteKate (talk) 23:49, 4 March 2021 (UTC)