User:Kaybraidi/sandbox

Update/Rewrite of introduction to remove opinion-based argumentative language and non-academic sources:
Sexuality and Disability refers to the intersectionality between these two parts of people's identities and how they interact with one another. The understanding of this intersectionality can help lead towards more inclusive social behaviors, policies, healthcare, education, and other competencies. An understanding of this intersectionality also helps inform how individuals with disabilities manage the complexities of sexual intimacy and how their sexual identities affect their relationships differently than individuals without disabilities. This intersectionality also helps inform how individuals with disabilities manage the complexities of sexual intimacy and relationships in the context of their sexual identities. This intersectionality of sexuality and disability is inclusive of both physical and mental disabilities. The need to develop such understanding is to dispel common myths and misconceptions about sexuality and disability.

Ean Neyrey PEER REVIEW

This is a very strong paragraph to add to the introduction. It offers a reason why studying and learning the intersectionality between sexuality and disability, which is an important topic and theory, is important.

Remove the word necessary. Possibly reword to something like "There is a need to develop such an understanding because it helps..." Words like necessary/vital/etc. are subjective and usually get removed in manuscripts.

Do you think you have any sources you could cite that prove how understanding the intersectionality helps with "social behaviors, policies, healthcare, education, and other competencies '' ?

UPDATE: I see you have quite a few citations at the bottom of the page. Could you please cite them throughout the article?

Ana Shack PEER REVIEW

I like what you are adding to the article with this, but I think some of could be reworded to make it easier to flow and read. Here are some examples:

"Sexuality and Disability refers to the intersectionality between these two parts of people's identities and how they interact with one another."

"An understanding of this intersectionality also helps inform how individuals with disabilities manage the complexities of sexual intimacy and how their sexual identities affect their relationships differently than individuals without disabilities."

I also think it would be good to add in something stating that both physical and mental disabilities interact with sexuality in this paragraph.\

Jake Adams PEER REVIEW:

Overview:

I think you're off to a good start. You've clearly done your research and I think if you listen to the suggestions and recommendations by your peer reviewers that you will have a great contribution to the Wiki :-)

Specifics & Suggestions::

I agree with what Ana Shack has said on your wording, and her example I think is great for improving initial understanding, without the need to reread more than once to get it. I also think you are coming close to overuse of the word 'intersectionality' if at all possible you could switch this up or reference it in another way, otherwise its not important and always best to remain consistently correct than use similar terminology.

Closing:

Overall I think you're off to a good start, and I look forward to seeing the final result! GOOD WORK! :-)

United States

 * Sentence to be included in History: The history of sexuality in the United States can be traced back to the 17th century, at which point topics of sex and sexuality which were once openly discussed became repressed, here so the heterosexuality became the normative sex and anything different considered a perversion.
 * Sentence to be included in History: Over time, education regarding sexuality and disability has slowly began to increase, however it is still a far cry from where it should be. Recently, programs have been started being initiated to promote sexual health education for people with disabilities.

Ean Neyrey PEER REVIEW

The first sentence you are adding doesn't make grammatical sense. Please reword and/or make it into two sentences.

Ana Shack PEER REVIEW

Please cite your sources to the end of each sentence!!!!!!

Also, for the first sentence try a different phrasing than "...can be traced back to..." because this makes it seem like sexuality did not exist before the 17th century. You could try something more like "Literature describing sexuality can be found in the United States starting in the 17th century..." or something like that.

For your second sentence: you cannot put phrases like "a far cry from where it should be" because that is too opinionated (I agree with you, but this is still currently a topic of discussion). Either omit that part, or you can say something that emphasizes how it still is growing more than how far it still needs to go.

Self-Image
Research has shown that self-image is a significant factor of concern amongst individuals with disabilities and can oftentimes impact the sexual health of an individual with disabilities. These include individuals with multiple types of disabilities and are not only limited to physical disabilities.

Source summary to be added: Sexual Satisfaction and Sexual Self Images of People with Physical Disabilities in the Netherlands

Source summary to be added: https://nda.ie/Disability-overview/Key-Policy-Documents/Report-of-the-Commission-on-the-Status-of-People-with-Disabilities/A-Strategy-for-Equality/A-Strategy-for-Equality-Report-of-the-Commission-on-the-Status-of-People-with-Disabilities/Sexuality-and-relationships

Ana Shack PEER REVIEW

Once again, please cite your sources for the first sentence!

Sexuality & Rehabilitation
Research has shown that topics of sexuality are not considered a primary component of training for rehabilitation professionals working with persons with disabilities. A 2010 study aimed at assessing the attitudes, knowledge and comfort of certified rehabilitation counselors related to addressing issues concerning disability and sexuality through the administration of the Knowledge, Comfort, Approach and Attitudes toward Sexuality Scale found that majority of respondents reported lacking adequate support and policy in their respective healthcare facilities, in addition to a lack of training resulting in discomfort by the counselors in addressing topics of sexuality with disabled patients.

A therapy tool known as the PLISSIT model was created in 1976 in order to help healthcare practitioners discuss and assist their patients with sexual health concerns. The model which stands for "Permission, Limited Information, Specific Suggestions, Intensive Therapy", allows healthcare professionals to begin conversations regarding sexual health concerns and make referrals to appropriate healthcare professionals when necessary to ensure that the client is receiving adequate support for sexual functioning concerns. The model has proven effective for individuals with disabilities as it is designed to be adaptable to various forms of treatment.

LGBT
Source summary to be added: Intersecting and embodied identities: A queer woman’s experience of disability and sexuality.

Updates/Edits of Sexual harassment, assault, and domestic violence:
Studies have shown that persons with developmental and physical disabilities experience high volumes of sexual abuse. A 2018 survey examining data from the ACHA-NCHA II survey results for Fall 2011 and Fall 2012 in order to find a common factors between lifestyle and abuse, found that persons with disabilities are at a higher risk of being victims of sexual violence than individuals without disabilities.

United States:

 * NCEDSV - The Nevada Coalition to End Domestic and Sexual Violence
 * CASACD - The Coalition Against Sexual Abuse of Children with Disabilities
 * NSVRC - National Sexual Violence Resource Center
 * RAINN - Rape, Abuse & Incest National Network

Ean Neyrey PEER REVIEW

Adding all of these organizations is an amazing idea. Can you provide a link to their websites?

I also see on the article that they give a description of the organizations. I'd add something to each of these!

Sources:
Hasson-Ohayon, I., Hertz, I., Vilchinsky, N., & Kravetz, S. (2014). Attitudes toward the sexuality of persons with physical versus psychiatric disabilities. Rehabilitation Psychology, 59(2), 236–241. https://doi-org.ezproxy.gl.iit.edu/10.1037/a0035916

Mona, L. R., Cameron, R. P., & Clemency Cordes, C. (2017). Disability culturally competent sexual healthcare. American Psychologist, 72(9), 1000–1010. https://doi-org.ezproxy.gl.iit.edu/10.1037/amp0000283

Hough, S. (2019). From the Editor of Sexuality and Disability: Global Perspectives on Sexuality and Disability. Sexuality & Disability, 37(4), 473–474. https://doi-org.ezproxy.gl.iit.edu/10.1007/s11195-019-09605-3

Hoorsan, R., Lamyian, M., Ahmadi, F. et al. Quality of Sexual Life in Iranian Women with Diabetes: Psychosocial and Cultural Aspects. Sex Disabil 39, 261–274 (2021). https://doi.org/10.1007/s11195-021-09683-2

Matin, B. K., Ballan, M., Darabi, F., Karyani, A. K., Soofi, M., & Soltani, S. (2021). Sexual health concerns in women with intellectual disabilities: a systematic review in qualitative studies. BMC public health, 21(1), 1965. https://doi.org/10.1186/s12889-021-12027-6

Ebrahimkhani, S., Nouri, R., & Azizi, M. (2017). The Impact of Sexual Esteem and Sexual Conscious on Sexual Satisfaction in Married People. Review of European Studies, 9(4), 123. doi:10.5539/res.v9n4p123

Drummond, J. D., & Brotman, S. (2014). Intersecting and embodied identities: A queer woman’s experience of disability and sexuality. Sexuality and Disability, 32(4), 533–549. https://doi-org.ezproxy.gl.iit.edu/10.1007/s11195-014-9382-4

Kedde, H., & van Berlo, W. (2006). Sexual Satisfaction and Sexual Self Images of People with Physical Disabilities in the Netherlands. Sexuality and Disability, 24(1), 53–68. https://doi-org.ezproxy.gl.iit.edu/10.1007/s11195-005-9003-3