User:KaylaJulien/Vaughan Mills/Otu.ak Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

KaylaJulien


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:KaylaJulien/Vaughan Mills


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Vaughan Mills

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi KaylaJulien,

I think you have made a great start on your addition to the Vaughan Mills Wikipedia page. Your contribution shows that you took the time to research the topic and incorporate relevant information.

I would recommend you proofread your contribution again as there were a couple grammatical errors such as words not being capitalized. In addition, a couple of words deemed incomplete. For example “fine ding and entertainment”. I believe you meant to write the word “dining”.

I would also suggest looking at the composition of your paragraph to make sure everything flows and sounds smooth. Reordering words is the best way to do this. Make sure to double check and see what you could potentially rearrange.

I like the source that you used for the assignment, however I do not know where you incorporated it into your work without reading the source first. Make sure you cite and embed the source right after the sentence in your paragraph that references it.

Overall, I think you did pretty well. Wikipedia can be confusing to navigate and I am still learning also. I believe proofreading your work one more time will go a long way

Cheers,

Otu.ak