User:Kayleegmorgan/Collaborative partnership/Liagabrielafp Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kayleegmorgan


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kayleegmorgan/Collaborative_partnership?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Collaborative partnership
 * Collaborative partnership

Evaluate the drafted changes
Although updating the Lead isn't pressing the article would still benefit from doing so considering that the Wiki Edu lessons emphasized that it should be more concise and give a synopsis about the topic. This could mean adding a sentence following ~

A particular concern that arises in both for-profit and academic partnerships has been the failure to reap benefits of collaboration at meso- and macro-levels. While Southern researchers, inventors and managers involved in cross-border collaboration projects have benefited individually, these benefits do not translate to improvements in their organizations and institutions, possibly reflecting a problem of agency in the relationship

~ that introduces the subheading {Challenges and Barriers of Collaborative Partnership} more explicitly. This portion also brings up a point of individual benefit that isn't directly present and thus could be further expanded upon while emphasizing historically underrepresented stakeholders/populations.

The article should also acknowledge that Collaborative Partnerships are pursued in additional fields in the ones outlined. Lastly I suggest that the information in the Lead that breaks down the term should instead be put under a heading labeled along the lines of {Terminology} or another definition-establishing title.

The content my peer included is organized, well-written, relevant, non-partisan, and insightful. The fact their contributions are so insightful actually seems to encourage adding further detail in regards to what, how, and why standards and reforms would benefit Collaborative Partnership. Something my peer could feasibly (considering time-constraints) clarify would be the sentence ' Themes surrounding inclusivity can also be a major challenge to partnership' that introduces their second contributing paragraph that could benefit from more clarity in following sentences {What themes? How? When?}.

The sources my peer included are scholarly and useful. I would additionally recommend diving further into the articles and referencing them more since they hone in on the issues of inadequate representation, lack of accountability and inclusivity, understandings of livelihood dynamics, and other missed opportunities that would strengthen Collaborative Partnerships.

Lastly it seems the subheading that my peer revised {Challenges and Barriers of Collaborative Partnership] is under the heading of {Sustainable Development]. I would also suggest that such subsection in addition to the prior subheading[Stakeholders} should be a heading since they are not limited to the topic of {Sustainable Development}.