User:Kayleegmorgan/Community service/Liagabrielafp Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kayleegmorgan


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kayleegmorgan/Community_service?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Community service

Evaluate the drafted changes
I felt that the Lead was acceptable but could benefit with being updated. Revising the lead to incorporate more of the benefits and strategies that encompass community service would improve encompassing all the sections included in the article.

The content Kaylee added was definitely relevant to the topic and was even able to incorporate a central class reading to her area. Her organization and sentence structure was satisfactory and fitting. Including the key terms of 'analysis' and 'strategy' once more could nonetheless be beneficial to tie it back to the main idea of the section. There is always room for expanding and contributing so the more this is done the sufficent the article and our Wikifinal will be.

Lastly further expanding on related historically underrepresented populations/topics could make the section more comprehensive since they have largely contributed to the formation of community organization separate from government to address needs. These infamously excluded and marginalized but crucial lived experiences/voices have also been central in identifying root causes. This could mean adding more from the Duriappah article and/or adding more from a diverse spectrum of authors/sources.