User:Kayyaguirre/David McClelland/Pat Miner23 Peer Review

General info
Kayyaguirre
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Kayyaguirre/David McClelland
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * David McClelland

Evaluate the drafted changes
After reading your draft, I think you did a great job with sourcing things and giving strong references. I think there could be a little bit more additions to the page, like potentially another picture of McClelland. In terms of the information you gave in each subsection that you have it broke down in, I think it makes clear and concise sense. A good way to add a little bit of information is talking about the fourteen companies he started and ran. Other than that, you did an amazing job of making great edits.