User:Kbae67/Jennifer Armentrout/Kjp001 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kbae67


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Kbae67/sandbox


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Jennifer Armentrout

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

- Yes, the lead has been updated. Important updates include: the removal of her date of birth as that did not have a source in the original article (although added back into the article at a later date with a source), addition of another genre that she writes in supported by a source, and addition of her pseudonym name.

- The introductory sentence is very strong and clearly describes who the subject its.

- Although the lead does not explicitly introduce what the sections of the article will include, the introduction of aspects of her personal and author life set up the rest of the article very well.

- There are additions to the introduction that you do not mention in the article (at least not yet, I am sure you are working on some of them) such as more information on her pseudonym name and her awards (which I see a note about at the end of your article). It may be beneficial to add some information about these since you mention them in the lead.

- The lead is concise.

Content

- Yes, all of the information is relevant to the topic and adds information that is lacking in the current article.

-The content seems to be up to date as the sources are from the past few years. Also, most of the information like her personal life does not really change.

- As mentioned earlier, it may be beneficial to add information about her pseudonym name and her awards as you mention them in the introduction.

- Yes! This author is female, and is thus thought of as a female topic, especially because some of her work is romance.

Tone and Balance

- All information is neutral and based on sources, not opinions.

Sources and References

- All sources seem to be from the last few years, implying current information.

- All links work.

- Every sentence is supported by a source. This shows me that all information is backed up and also this article is concise.

- The sources are diverse, and many seem to be primary sources that are interviews with the subject herself.

Organization

- This article could use a few more read throughs to correct grammar, but I am sure you already plan on that.

- One suggestion I have is to combine personal life and early life into one, and have early life be a subheading. The two sections are very strongly related and could be put into one.

Images

- No images included in the sandbox because there is already an image on the original article.

Overall

- These additions to the article are awesome! I really feel like you have brought this underrepresented article to a new level.