User:Kbrocckilli/City Symphony Films/ValkyrieOfWater Peer Review

General info
Kbrocckilli
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kbrocckilli/City_Symphony_Films?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

Assuming that the Introduction section is the Lead, what would be missing is a single-sentence introduction of City Symphonies, preferably beginning with the phrase in bold. Otherwise, it is a very informative and brief introduction to the concept.

Content and Organization:

Looks great, gives me what I want about a subject I don't know about. I really liked the organization, it's really clean and I liked the notable works section. I'm excited about what you're gonna fill in the blank underline with.

Tone and Balance:

Relatively neutral, there are points where adjectives are overly positive towards the filmmakers intentions. For example, I'd take out the words "hardworking" and "impressive" in this sentence to keep a more factual outlook: "Cities across the world such as Manhattan, Berlin, and Milan were filmed in admiration with positive images of their hardworking people and impressive industrial feats."

Sources:

I like the variety, overall I think this a great addition of an article.