User:Kbtkxh/Urania Propitia/Hygiea10 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kbtkxh


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Kbtkxh/Urania Propitia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Urania Propitia

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

User Kbtkxh's additions to the article provide important additional information and details about Urania Propitia and its relevance at the time of publication. The additions to the article are presented from a predominantly neutral point of view.

The sources cited by Kbtkxh are reliable and current, and the content accurately reflects what is in the cited sources (specifically the Forces of Nature book). The additions use correct grammar, but one suggestion for improvement would be condensing some of the multiple sentences starting with "Urania Propitia" into a more connected flow. Also, the sentence "The German publication led to establishing German as a scientific language." is an interesting (and possibly valid) point, although the source cited (Forces, p. 38) indicates that Urania Propitia was part of a number of "such publications [that] helped to establish German as an official scientific language", so it might be a good idea to explain this idea a bit more; otherwise the reader might come to the conclusion that Urania Propitia was a sole or primary cause of this change (although, if there are sources that affirm this idea, they should be included).

Overall, the additions to the article are a good start in improving the quality of the article by making it more complete. Urania Propitia is a historically underrepresented work and Kbtkxh's efforts to document its content and relevance contribute to Wikipedia's goal of addressing equity gaps. The content could be improved by the addition of more information as the semester progresses and the attentive use of available sources.

Peer Review Response
Thank you for your comments and suggestions in your review. I did not realize that I had not made my point about German as a scientific language clear and will definitely be editing that. I also plan on changing some of the wording to remove overuse of sentences starting with “Urania Propitia” due to your suggestion. I also see that you suggested using more sources, but unfortunately there are very few sources in English so I am limited in what I can use. Thank you again for the review.