User:Kcarreraholl/Émile-Jacques Ruhlmann/S1happy Peer Review

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Kcarreraholl


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 * Émile-Jacques Ruhlmann

Ruhlmann Article Review
I like what you have written so far but I am wondering where this is going to fit into the article? There are many different ways you can put this information in, I think maybe making his influences on the arts and crafts movement could be its own section.

II would like to make a suggestion of a rewrite:

Here is the original text:

"Émile-Jacques Ruhlmann's early designs reflected influences from the Art Nouveau and the Arts & Crafts Movements that were popular around in Europe. His later work could be traced to heavy influence from Venetian design during World War I. Although his early work was seemed to be influenced by the Arts & Crafts Movement he was very vocal of his disdain for the movement itself. He stated style and design trends started and were completely steered by the rich, as they were the ones who could afford such expensive trending items. His later designs seemed to cater to this affluent clientele including materials such as ebony, rosewood, and burl, all sourced from across the globe."

I would rewrite this to:

"Émile-Jacques Ruhlmann's earlier designs reflected influences from the Art Nouveau and the Arts & Crafts Movements that were popular around in Europe (insert dates). Although his work was influenced by the movement, he was very vocal of his disdain for the movement itself. He has been quoted as stating that style and design trends began and were controlled by the rich, as they were the ones who could afford trending items. As his career continued his work can be seen to be heavily influenced by the Venetian design that became popular during World War I. He gave into this idea of catering to affluent clientele, his later designs include materials like ebony, rosewood, burl, all sourced from across the globe."

''Also I would add bit more information if you can. Maybe add in some photos of his early and later work for reference in change of style.''

After reading the article here are some things I think could improve the article:


 * 1) There are large paragraphs in the biography section that do not have references, maybe try to find some to add credibility to the article,
 * 2) In the second paragraph of the biography section, someone has already referenced expensive materials used in his work.  I think your paragraph might work really well as the second paragraph in the biography. I think the paragraph would link the beginning and current second paragraph together.
 * 3) You could make a timeline of his work or a section on his notable designs.
 * 4) The "method" section I think is a great idea but it feels too small and out of place right now. It can be put into the bibliography section or it could be elaborated on.
 * 5) The article really has limited references, I think your reference is good but maybe you can add one or two more to beef up the article as a whole.
 * 6) Not sure if it is possible but I am wondering if the bibliography/references/external links section can be combined.
 * 7) What if instead of "external links" you made a "see also" section to other designers/designs related to his work.

Overall I do think your information adds to the article, maybe find more information or reformat some of the other parts of the article.