User:Kcobb123/Assistive Technology Acts/Ckirk9 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kcobb123, QuirozM18, Katiemwell, JordanEyes42


 * Link to the current version of the article you're reviewing
 * Assistive Technology Acts

Article Suggestions / Review
General Notes:

- more information about why these Acts were passed at the time they did

- more information of examples of Assistive technology

- overall, wording could be more concise and clear. might be helpful to reword some of the larger paragraphs/sections

LEAD:

"federal grants are granted" ... correct but redundant?

"expires each years" ... grammar error

"50,000,000 individuals with disabilities in the United States" ... citation for this number?

HISTORY:

"With the help of the government many people would be allowed access to equipment and devices they never thought they would get a chance to own." ... comma is needed

"Every state and territory of the United States was awarded a Tech Act project. The first group of projects started in 1989. Each state project had five years of funding under the 1989 law. A competitive grant application was required to receive an additional five years of funds. Projects were assured of eight years of full funding; the ninth year at 75% of full funding; and the tenth year as a Tech Act project at 50% of full funding." ... rewrite for clarity & citations are needed. why was the grant competitive? why were they assured five years of funding under the 1989 law but eight later in the paragraph?

ASSISTIVE TECHNOLOGY ACT OF 2004

link to George W. Bush wikipedia page

combine first two sentences to be concise?

ACCOMPLISHMENTS OF THE STATE...

"...be contributing members of their communities. " ... could be reworded better