User:Kdavis25/Concord, California/Yguzman10 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Kdavis25


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Concord, California
 * Concord, California

Evaluate the drafted changes
1.     The article does well in introducing the city as well as provide a couple of sentences into the Native Americans who live there today and in the past.

2.     I think the lead section of this article is straightforward and clear. There is not an overload of information where the reader can get lost. It also ties well with the history and demographics of the rest of the article.

3.     I suggest that you add a citation to the first and second paragraphs in the history section.

4.     Content- I think there could be a bit more background into the Miwok tribe from the area. When I clicked the link for it the article itself needs for. I f we get a bit more info into this article it would help tie the Miwok tribe to Concord area better.

5.     Government section may be too small. Perhaps name of the city officials can help improve this section.

6.     Perhaps the Port Chicago Disaster can be added to the Naval Weapon section to tie in the event to the city better. I am unsure where the event took place, was is in concord? The article says it was in the San Francisco bay but no mention of Concord.

7.     The article is very neutral I did not once find that the author tried to sway me one way or the other.

8.     Sources include a lot of online articles. No books or journals. Information on the article is coming from several sources though so there is a balance of information.