User:Kdirr2023/Hemisquilla genus/RuthSimmons Peer Review

General Overview
Whose work are you reviewing: Kdirr2023

Link to draft you're reviewing: Draft

Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Current Version

Lead

 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? Yes, the lead section seems to cover everything in the article
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?  Yes, the introduction is pretty concise and starts with the specific background of the topic, and also has a brief overview of each section.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? No everything on page seemed to be mentioned in into.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? Fairly concise, only about one paragraph, should be longer if any other sections are added to the article.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes, content is relevant since it covers abilities and some taxonomy, and predator/prey relationships.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? The content does appear to be up to date but does contain some older source material.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? Yes
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No, everything seemed equally discussed
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Some but not all. It seems that much of the content is meant to be cited, but its only cited at the end of several sentences? It is difficult to tell what exactly is their own work vs. source material. Should footnotes be used after each individual sentence that is cited? Not sure the exact rules on this, but I think you should probably cite a little more frequently to avoid being flagged for plagarism.
 * Accoring to the wikipedia help page on citations: "each section of text that is either based on, or quoted from, an outside source is marked as such with an inline citation. The inline citation may be a superscript footnote number, or an abbreviated version of the citation called a short citation." I'm pretty sure this means that there should be a citation for every sentence that has information from a source, not just once per paragraph or so.
 * For example in the paragraph on sound:"Patek and Caldwell (2006) found that this rumble in Hemisquilla californiensis is spectrally similar to the sounds produced by African and Asian elephants, ranging from 20-60 Hz with a strong secondary harmonic frequency. The species appears to produce this rumble by contracting a posterior muscle connected to a stiff extension of their carapace, the upper section of their exoskeleton. The sides of H. californiensis' carapace are covered in large red polarized spots. These spots vibrate during the rumble, which suggests that the rumble may generate both vibrational and visual signals (a multi-modal signal). It could even be used to interact with predators and burrow intruders as a defensive or territorial measure.
 * It can be difficult to tell what is supposed to be from the source or what is your own words.


 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.) Yes
 * Are the sources current? Mostly, some are older sources.
 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.) No, they had a good range of sources already
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Yes

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written? Yes, it is concise, clear, and easy to read.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? A few minor grammatical errors were found.
 * The order Stomatopoda, or stomatopods, are commonly referred to as mantis shrimp.
 * The order Stomatopoda, or stomatopods, is commonly referred to as mantis shrimp?
 * These animals are planktonic as zoea (larval stage), and rely upon drag-powered swimming to move around as adults.
 * No comma needed after (larval stage)?
 * A few different studies have tried to examine their emitted tonal, low frequency sounds, or their "rumble" as it is often called.
 * hyphenate low-frequency?
 * Hemisquilla have compound eyes divided into 3 distinct regions: two peripheral retinal regions (dorsal and ventral hemispheres) and one mid band region
 * hyphenate mid-band?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes, the current organization is a good place to start, but more sections could be added to improve the article. Also make the major sections ("Introduction", "Abilities", and Unique Threats) into the headers with the line underneath (like the "references") and then make sections within each header as the sub headings. This improved readability.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Yes, they have added lots of quality information that has improved the quality of the article.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? Each section of the paper has been thoroughly researched and well discussed.
 * How can the content added be improved? The article needs more sections to cover a wider range of information, such as behavior and distribution, habitats, anatomy and morphology, detailed taxonomy, adaptations, etc. You will also want to add some relevant images (make sure they follow the wiki guidelines on copyrighted images) to draw readers to your page. Images of the anatomy/morphology can be useful. Consider adding a cladogram or some form of a taxonomic structure.