User:Kelfryn/David J. Grain/Aliciab5334 Peer Review

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Article Strengths

 * 1) Cohesion of article
 * 2) Exact sentence structure
 * 3) Organization of article
 * 4) Balanced informational sources
 * 5) Reliable article source

Areas of opportunity
If there is a possibility of acquiring another article or two of source material to give more background on what he accomplished at Morgan Stanley. I found that I was extremely curious to know more about it. Also, as President, what was his solution to bring Pinnacle Holdings out of bankruptcy? Maybe the addition of these key factors would bring more highlights to his accomplishments in detail.

All sentences have neutral language, except for this last sentence. If this was reworked, I believe that the article would be more objective.

 This isn't to mean  that David J. Grain still isn't very active, because outside of Grain Management he is on multiple boards of directors and councils, including two different museums.

Overall
In conclusion, I found this article very insightful and written with the facts in mind. I believe these article authors have used their sourced materials justly. I have learned much from reading your article, such as formatting and organization. I will suggest this to my team, Great job!