User:Kelfryn/David J. Grain/Anthonyn256 Peer Review

General info
(Kelfryn)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Kelfryn/David J. Grain - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Article Strengths

 * very neutral in tone
 * good foundation of information

Areas of Opportunity

 * Article says David j. Grain often other options include Mr.Grain, David, or David Grain
 * No wiki links present plenty of notable companies and tittles
 * grammar errors one section says ten year. should read ten years
 * sections could be better separated using heading break instead of just bold text
 * bibliography is empty
 * could use more reference material the more material you have to pull from the less your article will sound like your just pulling bits from one article
 * Missing Media

Overall
The article has some great information about Mr. Grain and his accomplishments. There are some areas of opportunity some grammatical some just visual appearance and organization you have a great neutral tone when writing information about the topic. The two sources you have are good but i would recommend finding more sources will make the information easier to write about as well in you own wording.