User:Kellychen927/Fluxus/Wendychou.neu Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kellychen927


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kellychen927/Fluxus?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Fluxus

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Kelly, I'm not too familiar with Fluxus so I hope I don't sound presumptuous. :)

I did tiny bit of research and found that there are a lot more connections between Fluxus. The information you included is written in a neutral tone and you added new content below the proper subsection to provide more context to the topic. I think you can also think about including content of discrimination based on gender etc. that artists, composers, designers and poets have encountered to provide a more comprehensive view.

Here are some peer reviewed academic sources that may be useful for the feminism section:

Fredrickson, Laurel. “Trap: Kate Millett, Japan, Fluxus and Feminism.” Women & Performance, vol. 19, no. 3, 2009, pp. 337–367. (from the same book you've included in your bib)

Concannon, Kevin. “Yoko Ono's ‘Cut Piece’: From Text to Performance and Back Again.” PAJ: A Journal of Performance and Art, vol. 30, no. 3, 2008, pp. 81–93. JSTOR, www.jstor.org/stable/30135150. Accessed 21 Apr. 2021.