User:Kelseyflo07/Maria Nepomuceno/ZioBrandongo Peer Review

I find the main issue here is the length of sentences and the language used. It tends to read more like a review than a normal wikipedia article, having more colorful and opinionated language than purely factual.

While it is well written, it could use a more restrained structure that focuses more on just the facts. Also not including the references in the sandbox makes it a bit harder to parse which parts are cited.

Some sentences run on a bit, and I think restructuring some of them to be shorter would help it be more easily understood.