User:Kemorri/Lewy body/AJGatch Peer Review

General info
Kemorri
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

***** I am looking at the revision history, and it does not appear the article has yet been edited by Kemorri. Therefore, I will review the article as is without respect to Kemorri's contributions.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Lewy body
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lewy body:

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead -

The lead is effective, but it is a bit long. I think that the article could benefit from the two paragraphs comprising the lead being merged into one paragraph, with the information being made a bit more concise. Some of the details mentioned in the lead can be moved to the main body of the article. It also appears that a source in the lead needs to be updated with a better one. I think that the caption of the image to the right of the lead can be made a bit more concise as well.

Content -

The content is fairly well-referenced, but more up-to-date sources should be incorporated as many of the sources date back to the late 90s and early 2000s, and the field has progressed immensely since then. As it is currently, the article feels heavily imbalanced. There is a large section of the article devoted to the historical perspective, which is great, but I think there needs to be more content focused on the mechanisms of Lewy body assembly and their role in the diseases outlined in the lead. There is tons of research in this field, so I think there could even be sections for "In PD" "In DLB" etc, highlighting the research on Lewy bodies in each of the outlined diseases.

Organization -

This ties back to my previous comments, but the article could benefit with regard to organization by adding more sections that balance the content of the article and give a holistic introduction to Lewy bodies. I also disagree with the paragraph organization of the current article. Many of the paragraphs are rather short and this could be modified. The Lewy neurites section is also too short. I also think that the See also section could be greatly expanded as there is lots of relevant and adjacent subjects.

Images and media -

The caption for the first figure - a good figure indeed - should be greatly reduced so that the figure does not take up such an immense amount of space in the article. If reading on a computer, it is also kind of visually confusing as the figure description spans two sections of the article. The image in the cell biology section is too small and should be expanded or replaced by a larger image. It is good that there appears to be at least one figure for each section.