User:Kemorri/Nieng Yan/Ejgclemson Peer Review

General info
Kemorri
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kemorri/Nieng_Yan/Bibliography?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_bibliography
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Yan_Ning&oldid=1186907945

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

- I think the lead section of the article was fairly well written and concise. It did address all of the information included in the article so I don't think there was anything that needed to be added. However, a few of the sentences could possibly be rephrased just for smoother wording and an easier flow to the passage.

Content

- I do think the content in the article is all relevant and up to date; and the article definitely addresses an equity gap considering the topic is a biography of a chinese, female, biologist.

- The personal life section of the article is relatively incomplete as it only contains one sentence and could definitely use more information there. In that way the content of the article is somewhat unbalanced because it focuses on the career and professional life of Ning but does not include much about her personal life.

Tone and Balance

- I don't think any of the content in the article is meant to persuade the reader and it all does appear to be neutral. I don't have any suggestions in this area of the review, as it is well done and well written.

Sources and References

- The sources do all appear to be credible and recent, they seem to be good additions to the article.

Organization

- I think the article is fairly well organized and I think the sections are all well thought out. I also feel like all of the writing is concise and fairly well written, with few grammar errors. Some sentences could potentially be reworded for a smoother flow but I don't think it is a large issue at all.

- My one suggestion would possibly be splitting up the section about Ning's career into two subsections and separating the part about her awards, so that it is less overwhelming to read and breaks up the lengthy piece of text a little bit.

Images and Media

- There are no images in the article and I do think having an image to represent Yan Ning could be a good addition to the article.

Overall

- Overall I think the article is really good, although I would maybe make a few changes in terms of the flow and additional content. I also think an image would make the article a little more visually pleasing.