User:Kemrishae/Cannula (archaea)/Iroy00 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kemrishae


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kemrishae/Cannula_%28archaea%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall I think you have a great start. Starting with the first paragraph you go straight into where the cannula can be seen and in what species, I would like some additional information about how it is assembled or maybe functions of it. Any additional information would be great here as it is your first paragraph and most people will want to just quickly get most of the main points.

The physical structure section is very good in my opinion it gives most of the known knowledge about the makeup of the structure and how it is grown, however I would love to see some more in-depth scientific language to explain its ability to resist heat changes and maybe the actual glycoprotein subunits. I also think that this would be a great place to add images to help readers understand what you are talking about. I would also maybe directly cite studies to offer even more evidence on some of the claims if possible

Overall this is a great first draft, there needs to be more sections as well as some more details about the function, research both present and past and maybe even more information on the history of discovery. Other than that it meets most other requirements and is overall neutral.