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 * Culture of the Native Hawaiians
 * We chose this article because it is a part of our country with one of the most cultural backgrounds and a rich history.

Lead

 * Guiding questions


 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? The article's Lead leaves no question as to what the article is about. It describes the origins and age of culture, and includes a picture of Native Hawaiians performing a traditional dance. This perfectly illustrates the subject in question.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? Not everything. It does not include things like physical sport or the Westernization and commercialism that takes up a large part of the article. However, it does mention Hawaiian art, religion, and cuisine.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? No, it doesn't.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? The Lead is more concise. It is not overly-detailed but it could include more information and perhaps a longer(albeit brief) summary of the history of the Native Hawaiians.

Content

 * Guiding questions


 * Is the article's content relevant to the topic? It is but it could also include more of a history of the Native Hawaiians and present more details of (for example) how the Hawaiian monarchy came to be and how it ended, and more information on Hawaiian gods/religion.
 * Is the content up-to-date? The content does seem to be up to date, but there could be more information added.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? I think the content isn't completely neutral. It seems to paint Westernization in a negative light. Whether or not one agrees with this, Wikipedia pages must remain neutral, and the article doesn't do an optimal job of this.

Tone and Balance

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 * Is the article neutral? As stated above, it does not do the best job of keeping a neutral tone.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? The sections toward the bottom about Westernization and commercialism show favoritism toward painting Westernization of the Native Hawaiian culture in negative light, including talking about how Native Hawaiians don't like to perform at Luaus, they just do it for economical purposes.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? The history/religion of Native Hawaiians seems too underrated and the non-neutrality issues seem overrepresented. Not that there is a disagreement of what is being said, just that it is not neutral as it should be.
 * Does the article attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? For reasons stated above, yes.

Sources and References

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 * Are all facts in the article backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? There are plenty of sources and seem reliable like Encyclopedia Britannica. There were no ".com" sites.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Some of them are but some are very short.
 * Are the sources current? Some of the are a few years old.
 * Check a few links. Do they work? They all work.

Organization

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 * Is the article well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes, not difficult to understand at all. Perhaps too elementary in some sections.
 * Does the article have any grammatical or spelling errors? Some grammatical errors but nothing too noticeable.
 * Is the article well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? It is in order but there are topics that are in the article that are not discussed in the Lead, and these take up a large part of the article(Westernization/commercialism).

Images and Media

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 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? There is only one picture. It is a good representation of a Native Hawaiian, but there needs to be more pictures of artifacts, clothing, historical figures, members of the monarchy, etc.
 * Are images well-captioned? The one image on the article's captions describe it well.
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? Yes, the image is in the public domain.
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? It is at the start of the article, which is a good place to present an illustration of the people you are about to read about

Checking the talk page

 * Guiding questions


 * What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic? There have been changes made already. It looks like at some point the article was called "Culture of Hawaii". A lot of people deemed this too broad a title, so it was changed to what it is now. Also, some mention that there should be more information on agriculture, and what life was like before the Westerners arrived. There was also a picture of a Samoan dancer on the page, which someone in the Talk page pointed out. This was apparently taken down.
 * How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects? It has a stub-class rating and doesn't look like this exact article is part of any WikiProject, but there are related articles.
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class? Whenever you have an in-class discussion there is more room for personal opinion, and everyone presents their own perceptions of the topic. Wikipedia seems to be a little more matter-of-fact, although this article was not exactly neutral.

Overall impressions

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 * What is the article's overall status? Stub-class
 * What are the article's strengths? It talks about the contemporary issues Native Hawaiians face regarding Westernization.
 * How can the article be improved? It can be improved by talking more about Ancient Hawaii, agriculture, religion/gods, pictures of people/clothing/artifacts.
 * How would you assess the article's completeness - i.e. Is the article well-developed? Is it underdeveloped or poorly developed? This article is poorly developed but it is underdeveloped. There could be a lot more information added.

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