User:Kennedif00/Chronic pain/Anderson268 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kennedifoo


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kennedif00/Chronic_pain?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Chronic pain

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead seems to be pretty long, but it includes a lot of good information. It would be helpful to add a sentence that describes the major sections. The lead is good, and I would not add much more (other than the addition of the sentence describing the major sections).

Content

As mentioned in the instructor feedback, it is hard to determine if the added content is relevant. You do not have to bring over the whole article, but maybe just bring over the paragraph where this addition is to be added. There are also some grammatical errors that need to be fixed before any publication could be done.

Tone and Balance

The added information may not all be correct. If you keep the information, try going back to the article to create a paraphrase that better matches the material. Your addition makes it sound like all people will adapt to chronic pain; it could be that only some people are able to adapt. That would be an important distinction.

Source and References

The link to your source worked. Although, the source is a little outdated. Your source is from 2003, over twenty years old. Try finding more current sources that gather information from. I use psych info through UAB and have found most of my information through there. I believe you can sort or search by publication date.

Organization

Your content has a grammatical errors and is not very concise.

Overal Impression

Overall, you need to search for some more up-to-date sources to gather information from. Try sticking with sources published ten or less years ago. Make sure to clarify some of the information between your source and addition, if you decide to keep the source. Maybe you could add other outcomes to chronic pain. The original article only mentions sleep disturbances and an increased risk of death due to heart and respiratory diseases. Are there others? There is also little information on the comorbidity with trauma. There may not be a lot of information in these specific areas, but some additions would be interesting to read about. I wish you the best as you keep updating your article!