User:Kennedy.el/sandbox

Project 2

 * Add to Health marketing

Article Evaluation
I am evaluating the article about Twitch.tv.


 * The leading paragraph is packed with great info but the writing could be reworked.
 * Remove the sentence that says Twitch "eclipsed" Justin.tv. Sounds too dramatic.  The rest of the paragraph is fine
 * Update wording to reflect subsequent additions. (past tense, wording)
 * In the "History" section: clarify that Twitch having a monopoly is a worry/concern of some people and not a verified fact (this concern should still be included because it plays a part in the conversation around Twitch)
 * Vary word choice and sentence structure. Too repetitive.