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Article Evaluation of Pope Urban II

Under the struggle of authority section, this section goes to far in depth and could be reduced by hitting up the main points like how and when he took over as Pope. As well as quickly hitting on his supporters in a sentence or two. The whole article but specifically under the first crusades section there is way to much direct quotations from their sources. Needs to be rewritten with their own neutral ideas backed up by paraphrasing their sources and giving credit with the paraphrasing.

Also the article does talk about and shows the five different versions of Pope Urban's speech pertaining to the the first crusades and calling his fellow brothers to arms and to free the churches out east. This is a good way to stay neutral and let your reader decide for themselves. Kenneth Cornwell (talk) 17:36, 28 October 2017 (UTC)Kenneth Cornwell