User:KennyKetchum/Queeruption/ReluctantRambler Peer Review

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Queeruption (a compound of queer and eruption) is a direct-action gathering organized by radical queer groups that started in 1998 in London. These gatherings are designed for radical queer groups and indivuduals to exchange information and art, network, and organize, all with "do-it-yourself (DIY)" ideas and ethics. Shows featuring queer punk bands, performance artists, and other entertainment are put on at night. Workshops and demonstrations take place during the daytime. Queeruption generally takes place in a different city in a different country every year. It has contributed to anarcho-queer (queer anarchist) movements. The groups that organize each event and even within the same city may have disagreements about how aspects should represent politics including queer safe spaces.

Information for Queeruption has typically been spread through zines. In more recent years, the information has been spread online, such as the now defunct Queeruption website or Instagram for the 2017 Budapest festival. The moto of Queeruption is "Queer mutiny, not consumer unity," and generally these events stand for a display of queer expression that the groups argue diverts from the conventional Gay Pride events. According to the 2004 Queeruption Zine, the gatherings in the past have included "vegan meals, political discussions, direct action, skills, workshops, bands, spoken word, dressup and cabaret, dance parties, film screenings, radical sex, spontaneous haircuts, and more."

Although framed as a festival, Queeruptions' main purpose is community acitivism and outreach within queer communities around the world. Squatting has been an important part of past Queeruptions, as the first one in London was founded upon squatting in a gentrfiied area of South London. The justification behind squatting is the reclaiming of "public spaces" in order to use them as political, educational, and artistic spaces by queer individuals. Inherently, Queeruption participants see this squatting and gathering as an act of resistance against capitalism.

Origins
The first Queeruption was held in London in 1998 by a network of radical queer anarchists. According to the 2004 Queeruption Zine, the first Queeruption started with several queer activists in London squatting in a building one weekend with the goal of a "politically inspiring and educational gathering." This squatting and gathering of queer anarchists was the result of gentrification in a neighborhood in South London. This same zine states that the first Queeruption was in the Spring of 1998, however an article from Bi Community News in 1998 conflates this, determining that the first one occurred in a weekend in September. According to this same article from Bi Community News, the first Queeruption in London involved many different performances and presentations from various personalities and acts such as the performance artist The Divine David, bisexual writer Charlotte Cooper, queercore band Mouthfull, artist Sexton Ming, and playwrighter Marissa Carr.


 * 1) Generally, some spelling and grammar edits needed. Some terms could probably be hyper-linked to existing wikipedia articles (things like anarchoqueer, or queer anarchism, or things of that sort).
 * 2) The content you've added is neutral, and improves the existing article heavily.
 * 3) Melissa Carr should be referred to as a playwright, and not a playwrighter. Intro sentence could say "a compound word of queer and eruption" instead of just "a compound of queer and eruption"
 * 4) Your wording is quite clear, but redundant in some places: considering changing to "Queeruption generally takes place in a different city and country each year" and "the groups that organize each event, even within the same city and event, may have disagreements over the changing queer anarchist politics and ideas on display at that Queeruption."
 * 5) In the first paragraph, can you provide a source for performances at night and demonstrations/workshops at day?

Overall, this is a great few paragraphs! It's a big improvement from what came before.