User:KennyTharp/Players (magazine)/Bem2c4 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

KennyTharp


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Players (magazine)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Players (magazine)

Lead
The lead citation does not seem strong enough to be the first sources used out of the gate to characterize Players, maybe it does qualify for wiki's sources but I think maybe having a strong lead citation and section could better prepare the reader for the rich information to follow. Also, maybe give more information on the content of the magazine itself rather than just comparing it to Playboy.

Content
The content added is delivered in a even way. I do think the same depth information about the founders and owners should be matched with information about readership and contributors.

The table with featured models should have cited information about the women or should not be the way this information is conveyed. It seems like it further removes the feature women from their contributions and role in popularizing the magazine. Elaborating on the information the Miller-Young talks addresses in the vein of hypersexuality and looking to some the resources she used could add context and addition sources to the article that seem vital to explaining Players and its role in history and culture.

I think the international consumption of the magazine is another way to engage readers in overall market and cultural impact of the magazine.

Images and Media
The Playboy page has images from covers and spread, as well as contributors, and logos. This page should have the same information provided for its viewers. It would make the page more engaging and demonstrate visually the similarities and differences between Players and other magazines.