User:Kensey Smith/Max Wachtel/Wikibrim Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kensey Smith


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kensey%20Smith/Max_Wachtel?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The content is well written but lacks consistent use of verb tense towards the beginning of the article. Some word choice at the beginning introduction is difficult to follow ("...ranging from some to most severe mental illnesses...") and could be worded in a more clear manner. There are a few grammatical errors, specifically commas, that are missing from the article and a few run-on sentences as well. The article is broken down into sections that do a good job of reflecting major points and each section does a good job at providing concise and clear information that is on topic. It might be helpful to break down some of the larger sections into smaller sub sections, particularly in the "Career" section.