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Well, I really appreciate the hard work which has been put into this article. But unfortunately but I'm afraid that but I'm afraid that I'm not going to be able to list it as a GA.

The lead just mentions Kali in different epics like Vishnu Purana, Kalki Purana and Mahabharata. It doesn't summarize the entire article. As a rule of thumb, I would like to have a detail from each and every section. But there is no mention of Kali's life, death, significance in the lead.
 * Lead

This section describes Kali but it doesn't have an Image here. The section needs an Image especially so that people can visualize.
 * Description

This section looks good from above. But when you read the section, it looks like a story. Example:
 * Life

The Brahmin Pravara was given a magical ointment that allowed him to fly when he spread it on the bottoms of his feet. But when he flew to the Himalayas and walked around on the mountain snow, the ointment was washed away keeping him from returning home to his wife. During his time on the mountain, the Apsara Varuthini fell madly in love with him and begged the Brahmin to stay with her forever. But he rejected her advances because his guru had told him to never lust after another man’s wife. He prayed to Agni who returned him home safely.

According to Markandeya Purana, The Brahmin Pravara was given a magical ointment that allowed him to fly. But when he flew to the Himalayas, the ointment was washed away keeping him from returning home to his wife. During this time, the Apsara Varuthini fell madly in love with him and begged the Brahmin to stay with her forever. But eventually, he rejected her. He prayed to Agni who returned him home safely.

This list is not exhaustive, I have just tried to give an idea of the sorts of issues that need to be addressed before a successful GA nomination.

Kali dies one-third of the way through the Kalki Purana->>what do you mean by dies. How is it encyclopedic. The stench of his blood billowed out and filled the atmosphere with a foul odor.--->peacock terms. The author comments, "Unlike most battles between gods and demons, however, this apparent victory is immediately undercut, for Kali escapes to reappear in 'another age'—in our age, or the next Kali Age."-->>Who is this expert author Since he had the power to manifest himself in human form on earth, he was able to forsake his dying corporal form to escape in spirit.--->>Why do you require tems such as dying corporal here. Can't you make it simple.
 * Death


 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written:
 * [[Image:X mark.svg|50px]]Fail...needs a little bit more work
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable:
 * [[Image:Yes check.svg|50px]]Pass looks fine it seems.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage:
 * [[Image:Yes check.svg|50px]]Pass
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy:
 * [[Image:X mark.svg|50px]]Fail..It may invite POV problems in Religion and Politics
 * 1) It is stable:
 * [[Image:Yes check.svg|50px]]Pass That's good too.
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate:
 * [[Image:X mark.svg|50px]]Fail,,description section doesn't have an Image
 * 1) Overall:
 * [[Image:X mark.svg|50px]]Fail

Good luck, and I hope to see this article back at GAN very soon.... Kensplanet Talk  E-mail  Contributions