User:KenzeeF/Hamus (archaea)/Colettemort Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

KenzeeF


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:KenzeeF/Hamus_%28archaea%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
When reading the first few sentences I was a little confused on the topic of the article and thought it was just on archaea. I'd recommend trying to discuss hami within the first sentence or two. I would also use the introduction paragraph to make the points of the rest of your article, so maybe make separate sections in the remainder of your article about the points you made at the end of your Lead. You have good resources and information, I would just check on the dates for a couple of your references. Overall I think you're on the right track I would just bulk it up with some more information and work on your Lead to make it obvious what the entire paper is about, because I feel like the history of archaea is discussed extensively.