User:Kermitdawormit/Dougong/RileySchill4 Peer Review

General info
Kermitdawormit
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:Dougong
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Dougong

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The lead section of the article has been updated for this assignment to reflect the article and the added information. The article uses the leading sentence to clearly define what we are learning about and what it is. The lead includes brief descriptions of the various article segments. Mostly the lead does not give any information not seen further in the article, however the time period for the earliest use of dougong might be exclusive to the lead. This is a small thing however and not really intruding on the rest of the article. The lead may be a little too detailed. Some details in the lead may fit in well with other sections, making the lead more concise, but it is not too lengthy.

Content:

The content is good and logical; it makes sense why the information is included. There does not seem to be any obvious content missing. The article covers a comprehensive breadth of information about what a dougong is, what it does, and its change over history. The topic deals with Asian cultures and is probably not common knowledge to the general public.

Tone and Balance:

When talking about the subject the author maintains a neutral tone on the subject. None of the claims seem biased. The last section, "Earth Quake Resistance" seems under-presented. The article might go into more detail about the modern day tests that proved dougong effective, or it could elaborate on historical instances where structures have been preserved by them.

Sources and References:

There are instances where information feels like it needs a source, whether that is a new or re-used one. The content does accurately reflect the sources, but the sources do not seem academic or credited in the area. The added sources are fairly recent, coming from within the last ten years. From what I can tell the authors of the added sources do not seem particularly qualified, although the information given seems to be correct when cross referencing. The links given by the student all work.

Organization:The content is concise and clear. It is organized in a manner that makes sense when covering all general aspects of dougong. There are some grammatical errors, but they are few and far between.

Images and Media:

The images work well to provide a visual of the object. The captions are in depth and informative. They seem to follow copy right rules, and they are laid out in a vertical way that complements the information.