User:Ketiaing/Culture of Burundi/Aphroditia Peer Review

Peer Review
Ketiaing
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ketiaing/Culture_of_Burundi?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Lead

 * There is no lead available. I recommend this article start with a leading statement about the "Culture of Burundi" that includes a statement about its significance.

Content

 * The content is relevant to the topic, however, both the flow and the links between each heading are lacking. For instance, speaking about the people of Burundi is incredibly pertinent to the topic at hand, but at the same time, would pre-colonial and colonial society be relevant? How? Would it be better to speak about the nation's culture during a certain era, and use that as a heading instead?
 * The content seems up-to-date, ranging from 1964-2023.
 * I believe there are a few subheadings that are missing, including Dance, Visual Art, Customs, Food, etc.
 * The article deals with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps, and addresses a topic related to historically underrepresented populations and topics.

Tone and Balance

 * The content is neutral.
 * There is a claim that "there are no records of discrimination during this time" regarding pre-colonial Burundi society. Unfortunately, no sources were used for this statement. A reader could surmise that Burundi culture was peaceful during this time.

Sources and References

 * TBD

Organization

 * The content lacks flow and coherency. It is hard to read.
 * There are several grammatical errors to address.
 * The content needs to be better organized, i.e. add a lead section, table of contents, and possibly add other headings pertaining to the culture of Burundi. Otherwise, the article is more about the people of Burundi rather than its culture.

Images and Media

 * The article contains an image of Burundian drummers. It does add dimensionality to the "Music" of Burundi. It would be interesting to mention the practice of placing the drums on the drummers heads in this section.
 * The image's caption could include context of where and when these drummers were performing.
 * The image adheres to Wikipedia's copyright regulations.
 * The image is placed in an appropriate section.

New Article Considerations

 * The article meets Wikipedia's notability requirements.
 * There could be a greater list of sources regarding Burundi's culture.
 * The article does not follow the flow of other similar articles given that it lacks a lead.
 * The article does link to the "Music of Burundi."

Overall Impressions

 * The topic seems incredibly interesting, however, the information added feels sparse and incomplete. There is no connection between pre-colonial and colonial society regarding Burundi's culture, and there are several other aspects of culture missing from the article.
 * The strengths include the potential to expand on a topic as vast as Burundi's culture. Following up on the mentions of pre-colonial and colonial society, this opens up a large area to specify Burundi culture during different periods of time.
 * I recommend focusing on creating a flow to increase readability. For instance, from context (lead section) to different subsections (instead of focusing on different time periods) of culture would make the article succinct.