User:KevinAbbondanza/Naima Jillal/Jbrie002 Peer Review

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The content is very interesting, credible and certainly up to date. They do a good job in the introduction emphasizing the fact that it is rare for women to be involved in drug trafficking on such a large scale, and how she was an exception to the rule moving cocaine on an extremely large scale. Because I have personally never heard of this person, I appreciate the fact that they do a good job of writing about how she entered the industry, and how she continued to thrive despite the inequity of women in the "business." She initially got her foot in the door with a gentleman named Mustapha El Fechtali during the assassination of Samir Bouyakhrichan in 2014, and from there she did not turn back. Her ability to speak Spanish allowed her to Spanish, Naima Jillal to manage cocaine orders from South American cartels very fluidly and without language barriers; allowing her to continue moving drugs successfully. I feel like the criminal career section of the article could've been organized a little bit better, as it seems like there are just different facts and pieces of information scattered throughout with sources attached. The information is very interesting however, with not too much bias at all just good raw information on the content of her career, and how she went about her business. I enjoyed how the information was split up, in chronological order of her life, but I can see how it would be a tad bit difficult to read, as the few sources listed are just put directly after each individual piece of information. I do believe that the content has added to the overall quality of this article, adding good information with a couple of good sources making sure that the reader knows everything is credible, as well as providing a nice image to really let the reader in on the magnitude of cocaine that was being trafficked.