User:KevinAbbondanza/Naima Jillal/Ncarpenter1805 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Namia Jillal


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:KevinAbbondanza/Naima_Jillal?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Great start! Your lead paragraph I thought was very well thought out and written. Grabbed my attention from the start. Just be mindful about where you are putting your references. It seems as they where placed in the sandbox draft right after the lead, when it should be hyper linked at the bottom of your page using the "Bibliography" option on our dashboard. (Let me know if you need some help figuring this out!) As I stated in other peer reviews, the picture you have chosen is very much related and important to be there because it shows a relevant view point of what Naima Jillal was doing to make her notable. Because of her occupation I understand it might be challenging to find a picture of Naima Jillal. However, if try to do some digging to see if you couldn't maybe find something similar to a head shot.